Young gun

Hey......nice new idea there.Its quite different and really intriguing. At first its kind of hard to believe that female players display more aggression and ruthlessness on the field than men ...

When I began writing,I used to rely on these random thoughts because it seemed to have caught my attention and needed to be put down at that particular not ignore ...

This poem has been written really well. The children cry. The parents weep. As death makes rounds through the streets. Perfect lines!Really brings out the havoc war causes. The destruction ...

Cry of the One Eyed Boy He looked at the sky with his only eye With palms folded he began to cry I’m just a little kid, who’s barely eight ...

Since thedelphinater already pointed out the improvisations I'll talk about what I really liked about this poem. The narrator really makes the point of the poem very clear.I could empathise ...

Welcome to YWS.I'll be the first one to review your work. This was poem was really nice due to its simplicity. Not many people choose to write simple stuff like ...

This poem was really refreshing and different from other serious poems.Its something many little kids can relate to. You have really captured the emotions and innocence very well. This was ...

If this was your first serious piece of work in poetry,its a really good beginning. The poem has really good imagery and the choice of words is also really simple. ...

This was an extremely unconventional and amazing poem.This poem really makes you think deeply about the underlying message present in it. From when were seeds until when we are sprung ...

This was an extremely unconventional and amazing poem.This poem really makes you think deeply about the underlying message present in it. From when were seeds until when we are sprung ...

A very well written and emotionally gripping story.This is what I suppose could help you improve it: He had been in a car accident at the end of the year, ...

Tick tock Tick tock time flies by Moments left before I die I go backwards, begin to think About chances that I let sink Hidden feelings never revealed All my ...

The choice of your subject for this poem was really nice.Here are a few things that might help you a little more: You need not use the words tick tock ...

This poem brought out man's common questions in an honest and simple presentation. The narrator's question sticks thought the poem and his building rage for inability to know the mystery ...

This poem was really nice and constructed with subtlety.Here are somethings I thought that might help you: His artistically calloused hands Avoid the use of big words when it really ...